I’m entering a travel writing competition with a brief to write a 500 word piece to illustrate an adventure/travel experience. I’ve pasted in below my first draft which requires a lot more work but would be grateful for any feedback from my readership!!!! Please feel free to leave comments and suggestions for change…
Iran may not be everybody’s choice as a holiday destination, conjuring up dismal images of a brutal regime: black and red revolutionary banners strung across grey streets; armed policemen on every corner. But was it really so grim?
Walk down Vali-e Asr Avenue in Tehran at 6pm and you could be in any other city: it’s heaving with shoppers, teenagers eating chips from polystyrene trays, commuters hurrying to the underground station and the after-hours office crowd queueing for cinema tickets. Tonight there’s a new film; a huge illuminated sign shows a veiled girl gazing up at a sullen youth, his hair flopping foppishly over one eye.
Florescent lights illuminate a pavement polished pebble-smooth by an early evening shower. Gleaming yellow cabs jostle for position, their horns blaring wildly. I clutch my newly purchased headscarf and black manteau: a little like a coat dress, a lot like a rain coat, the manteau ensures women comply with the Islamic Republic of Iran’s dress code. But despite the rules, Iranian girls still look glamorous – their brightly coloured scarves perched atop elaborate hair styles; their figure -hugging manteaus daringly cinched in at the waist.
Stopping at a pastry shop, I gaze at the silver trays of pastel-coloured cakes and sweets. It’s warm inside and the air is rich with almond and vanilla. I order Turkish Delight: luscious cubes of delicate pink, lightly freckled with crushed pistachios. Delicious.
A group of teenage girls bundle into the shop. They want to chat and their English is good. Their leader, a serious girl in a long black chador, takes charge: ‘Where are you from please?’
‘I live in England.’
Shrieks and calls of excitement. ‘English ! We love England !’
This isn’t what I expected. I relax and ask: ‘What is your name?’
Then they come – exotic sounding names I can never hope to pronounce.
A girl in a Burberry headscarf and coral lipstick asks what I think of Iran. I tell her Iran is beautiful.
And I mean it.
‘Excuse me – headscarf – good ? Bad ?’
I play the diplomat: ‘Good and bad. Do you like the headscarf ?’
Half shake their heads – others nod demurely. They are divided on this point.
My chador-clad friend asks another question: ‘Madam – what do English think of Iran?’
I take a chance: ‘English think Iran dangerous country – Iran not safe.’
They laugh together and smile at me.
‘Iran very safe country.’
I have to ask: ‘What do Iranians think of England?’
‘England not safe. English scared of Iranian people. English think we are terrorists.’
We look at each other and smile. We’re sisters sharing a moment of irony and I’m happy. I’m happy that we can talk freely, but most of all, I’m happy that we can separate politics from people.
Parting company we embrace and brush cheeks. We have all learnt something. Insha’Allah.